Image you have finished a long, hard day at school in Jamaica. On your way home, you decide to take a rest on the beach.
Write one or two paragraphs all about what you saw and how you felt. You should focus on describing the setting using all your senses (see, hear, smell, feel).
I'm lying on the beach , smelling the Jerk Chicken on the BBQ , Hearing the waves crashing onto the Jamaican island. I also feel the waves landing on my toenails. I can see the palm trees swaying on the island.
ReplyDeletei can hear the waves on the beach .it feels like somebody is giveing me a mashars .the palm trees are swishing side toside it is rillasing .the birds are singing a sweet song wich is very lovely.the sand is smooth it ticles my toes . and the smells of sweet saviry
ReplyDeleteIf I was in Jamaica I would eat a coconut tree.If I was in the beach I would hear bright blue salty sea crashing in the hot,dry sand like a thunder and the wind is slowly moving the palm trees.
ReplyDeleteI was listening to the light blue waves flowting gently on to the sand.I felt like i was on relaxing on the sunny beach i felt like i was in jamaica.
ReplyDeleteI have jest finished school and I want to go lie down on the sand. So I went to the nearest beach and lay down on the golden sand. I could hear the waves gently lapping on the sand, the birds chirping, trees swaying, and a cool breeze blowing over me. I felt relaxed at last. It was so nice to finally be out of the classroom.
ReplyDeleteOn my way home I finally finished my boring school. I decided to lie on the hot blistering sand but unfortunately I couldn't go there because I needed to do my homework first. I did my homework then I went to the beach . . . To Be Continued
ReplyDeleteI shaked my shoes out and I land on the golden sand. I feel the wind blowing on my feet. I also smell the jerk chicken on the BBQ. I can hear the birds chirping and tweeting around the island and I can see the wind blowing onto the palm trees swaying on the beautiful island.
DeleteI was on my way i felt the strong cool wind blow against me and i stopped and looked for a nearest beach an when i got there i kicked of my shoes and layed on the hot blistari sand.
ReplyDeleteWhat could you smell and hear around you as you lay on the blistering hot sand?
DeleteI just came back from school so i decided to lay on the lovely hot sunny beach because at school we had to do maths and it was really borring so i went on the burnning hot sand and listend to the light blue sea gently spllashing on the burnning sand.
ReplyDeleteA lovely description of what you could feel and hear, Liani. What could you smell and see?
Deleteit was a overheating day i wanted to go to the beach because it was a long day at school my teacher made us write a story all day so i got there ilayd on the x-treme hot sand so i watched the light waves go onto the gleaming sand
ReplyDeleteI like your description of the heat of the sand. Remember that the proper spelling of 'extremely' with an 'e'! How were the waves going into the sand? Try to think of an interesting verb you could use to describe this.
DeleteThe wind halling that it dlows the tris
ReplyDeleteOn my way home after a long day at school I felt like I needed a nice relaxation on the beach.The beach felt so soft ,the sand was so hot on the ground. The birds singing was amazing.On the palm tree there were fresh coconuts.I the texture was so rough but the co co nut juice was so fresh.the waves were laping on to the beach . This made me feel calm . I went to the sea. i said "Why not go for a swim.The water was so cold it was relaxing.
ReplyDeleteAfter the swim i called my friends so we could have a race. They all came over and i came first in the race.We had some jerk chicken and floped on the golden sand.In the jerk chicken my friend Matthew's dad had made the best jerk chicken.We played loud music and had a party. The drinks were amazing . At last I went home, the party was fun I was really tired.
It had been a long boiling hot boring day.The teacher let us do maths all day.i was hopeless i could not do a thing more.I went to the beach and sat down on the hot golden sand and looked as the light blue sea passed by...
ReplyDeleteI listened as the warm wind came whispering through my ear ,i felt like i was in heaven then i started hearing little children disturbing my peace.i leaned up then i saw the time then ran home.
DeleteI listened as the warm wind came whispering through my ear ,i felt like i was in heaven then i started hearing little children disturbing my peace.i leaned up then i saw the time then ran home.
Deleteon my way home I saw a beach so I ran to it and I down hearing the salty waves gently scraping the hot,golden sand away.I can see the palm trees waving there leaves,it started getting more hotter so I kicked of my shoes and swam and swam and swam until I was so happy that I saw some juicy mangoes that I got one and ate it by myself
ReplyDeleteI saw waves lapping with the shore at rapid speed.I can see waves getting larger and larger splashing against the surface.I can hear the water bashing like rocks collapsing.I can hear a man laughing like someone told him a joke.I can see the palm tree swaying forwards and backwards with coconuts dropping like leaves in autumn.I can hear traditional music with one of the instruments all I think is drums.
ReplyDeleteI felt lonely,hungry and bored there was no entertainment unless you wanted to join an adult party I wish I planned this out asking some of my friends to come so we can play games together.all I smelt was the salty sea and burning sand with not much oxygen. To be continued
On my way home I was so hot I need to relation. so I went to the beach. I went in the pool. It cold me down swim in the pool some of my friend came we played then I would sit down in the beach but it was to hot. SO I got my towel then I cant believe my eyes waves was lapping water was smashing the rock. It was awesome I could hear a dram banging it sound like it was coming but then 2mins later I could hear anything water stop smashing the rocks. Then I saw palm tree growing it tiny some one came and plant it hear I saw 3 big palm tree I was playing then I forget to go home. Then my friend left is bucket so I got his bucket bring some water so when I got hot I will but my face inside the bucket at school I was going to the beach but my mum come take me .
ReplyDeleteInteresting ideas, Rayyan. Now write about the smells you experienced as you lay on the beach. Remember to check your work for capital letters and full stops before you publish.
DeleteSchool finally finished all the time we just did maths all day long I really need a relax so I ran out of school and went to the closes beach so i lay down and have a little rest my back felt a little hot i felt like all of my skin is peeling off! Then i put my beach towel and lay on it and continued relaxing then I felt a bit too hot so I thought to have a little dive so I put on my swim suit and went for a swim when I got to the walter I felt like a god I got a little hungry and my lips were purple so I went back to the changeing room and put my clothes on and dryed my self then when I got home I took a shower to take off all of the salt.I got starving so i asked my mum for a some food.When I finished i went to play for a bit untill my bedtime i played: FootBall,Race,BasketBall and I played with my bike.Then it was my bedtime I brushed my Theeth and read myself a Bed Time story.
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You have included some interesting ideas here, Melissa. I feel you have rushed ahead though and tried to write a whole story in one paragraph!
DeleteNow focus more on the setting as an introduction to your story. You write that you are hungry? What smells around you are making you hungry? Describe them.
How did the water feel when you swam in the sea? Describe it.
Cool story but how could your lips purple when your hungry?
DeleteAfter a long hard school day I decide I could not take it anymore so I went to my local beach.When I got there it looked luxurious I ran to lie down on the desert like sands it felt like I was sitting on a bucket of roasted food so I put down my colorful beach towel, I could hear the waves crashing on to the shore and the wind was blowing against the palm trees while the coconuts fell with the bananas I ate one and it had the most creamiest filling ever I said to my self luxury is calling.I sat there until the turquoise and indigo tide came in.
ReplyDeleteWow! Wonderful descriptions Ellie. I particularly like the part about feeling as if you are sitting on a bucket of roasted food because you have used inference here (you haven't directly told the reader how hot the sand is but your wonderful description allows them to imagine it).
DeleteHow could you describe the sound of the coconuts falling? How about the smells around you?
As you write, remember to check your sentences for full stops and capital letters.
The Coconuts sounded as if a smooth plank of wood fell of a weak tree branch
DeleteOn the way to home I stopped at the beach and took of my shoes and I lay did down on the nice hot sand. To be continued ...
ReplyDeleteWhat other adjectives could you use here instead of 'nice,' Keneil?
Deletei was back from school i was so bord from that boring test i felt like i needed a big long brake so i went to the beach. i the waves crashing a again and again i dashed of my shoes and sat on the sand it was so burning hot it felt hoter than the sun it self i jumped up i layed may sun blanket.
ReplyDeleteto be continued.
A good start, Kermarley. As you lay on your sun blanket, what did you hear and smell around you? How did it make you feel? Remember to check your spellings and that you have full stops/capital letters in the right places before you publish.
DeleteIt was a hot day at school when i was doing my maths i just wanted lay down somewere i could cool down i thought my mind was going to burst in to flames . and decided to go buy some ice cream and go home and kick off my shoes and watch Tv and becouse it was so hot out side i wanted to go to the be
ReplyDeletebeach and dive into the sea with the large waves
but it just keept getting hotter and hotter so the next day i went to school it was even hotter then yesterday in diden't know what to do i went to the beach again i heard rocks bashing together then it got colder then it went frezing cold.to be continued
Today i came back from school and i was tired then i came past this sandy beach so i decided to have a little nap and as soon as i sat down the sand was boiling! it felt like i was siting on fire so i strait away jumped on my beech Towl now that felt better now finaly i rested in peace.
ReplyDeleteOn my way to school the teachers were planning if we would go to the beach to relax in the sun. One day the teachers concluded that we can go on a trip to the beach, we took a coach all the way there, it took 2hrs and 30minutes. We went to the beach in Brighton. As soon as we got there everyone was tired. We walked and walked till we reached where the beach was.
ReplyDeleteI saw a big ginormous wave, it(waves)arched and crashed against the surface, the wind made the sea pushed the sand to come back. I also saw a big mountain facing the trees, the mountain was enormous.
I felt really exited going to the beach, I really had fun there, I even felt surprised going to the beach.
I heard a wave crashing to the sand and it was banging so loud that I could not hear anything else. I smelt water falling on the sand and I smell a mountain that crashes into the sea.
On my way home from school I decided to go to the beach for a while. I mean, today at school all the teacher did was maths. It was so boring and it was boiling hot in there, like an oven. I trodded over to the beach and took off my shoes. The warm sand felt amazing and I lay down. I watched the tide go in and out and breathed in. I smelt some chicken on the barbecue and sat up. I ran over to get some and it was delicious. The barbecue sauce and the succulent chicken was a great combo.
ReplyDeleteI said to myself "Why not go for a dip?" and ran to the sea. I put my legs in and kicked them around . It felt amazing, all the water on my face. It was so cold, but in a good way. Then the steel band started to play. I jumped up and started dancing. I was dancing and dancing, having so much fun until I remembered my family. I grabbed my shoes and and shoved them on. I ran home and Mother asked me where I had been. I couldn't tell her I'd been to the beach so I told her I was at school doing a test but I knew she didn't believe me so I went up to bed straightaway.
after school my brain was tired so i went to the beach for a lie down in the sand it started burning so i went for a swam then i was frezzing so i got my towel and went home when i got home i went on my bed thinking about the maths then i went to the beach again so i lay on the sand it was to hot then i went in the waterit wasn't that cold this time so i stayed in the water for ten minits then i went out of the water and went hom again the next day school was closed so i went in the water but then i saw a shark so i just lie down on the sand on my towel eating jerk chickenwhen i finish i got home on my bed the maths was still inside so i did my homwork when i finish i finish
ReplyDeleteOne my way from a long day of school i decided that i wanted to go to the beach to relax, after a long days work of maths. My hand was sore from all the writing in class. I was so tired that i could just lay in the sand forever because the sand is boiling hot. I kicked of my shoes and lay on the golden crispy sand after a wile, i heard the palm trees swishing. The water crashing into the rocks i felt so calm and relaxed just there. Then they was having a BBQ i could smell the jerk chicken and patty. There was a silver drums playing i love the how you play the in different ways and they have different sounds. To be continued
ReplyDeleteI came out of boring school and ran to the beach. As soon as I got there I took of my school cloths and put on my swimming kit and dived into salty fresh sea. I went on the sand to have a tan to be continued.
ReplyDeleteToday at school I did some boring maths work allday long it took forever when it finished I needed a bit of relaxation on the beach so I went to have a lay down but the sand was burning my back so I put my beach towel down and realaxed on the beach amost all day when it was about 5'00pm the steel band came and played there music for 2 hours. To be continued...
ReplyDeleteAs soon as I was going home I saw the beach ,so I ran of to cool down. Then a minute I saw some people playing so steel drums ,it was so joyful then my friends came along Roses mum cooked so jerk chicken and patty . After a while we played soccer and cricket . We had fruit the fruit we had ginnip ,so then after that we all went home then my mum said "where did you go " I replied " the beach " " why"to be continued...
ReplyDeleteOne day i was on my way home from school . I decided to go to the beach because i had a very very long day from doing English and maths .So i put my feet on the cream sand .When i was so hungry i eat my left over lunch and inside it was ice lollies which is my favrout i heard the waves crashing againts each over as the sun was swept on my fourhead To be continued
ReplyDeleteon my way home I saw the beautiful beach it was calling my name I had to go after a awful day at school the teacher shouting and all that maths so I had to go I lay down on tho hot sand it was to hot for my skin tipe so i lay down my beach towel To be continued.
ReplyDeleteOne day i was on my way home and i decided to go to the beach.Because i had a long day at school and the teacher was talking a lot about maths and english.So i went there and i took of my shoes and i rubed my toes in the sand then i ley down and the hot sand bernd me so i put my beach tawel on the sand then next i grumped in the cool water and that felt nice expeshley on a hot daylike this .And that was good i had to get back home i giust wonted 20 minites more at the beach so i spent 20 more mintes then i played and had fun there .I eat food from my school and i was haveing so much fun i forgot whatb time it was the sum set down and i wiped all the swet of my head and i forgot one more fing lison to the sea and the wind.TO BE Continued...
ReplyDeletei came back from a boring test of words at school so i desided that i will go to the beach where is going to be relaxing. when i went to the beach i relaxed in the boiling sand when i landed to the sand.The heat was rolling in my back then it walked to my shoulders then i give up i put my tawole liying in the sand then for a wile i went to serve a little in the water after i swam to feel the relaxing sea i went to the shore to relax to be continued....
ReplyDeleteAt the beach it was a hot sunny day i kicked my shoes and relaxed on the sand the sand was bristling hot it boiled my back so i took out my towl and relaxed on it the crashing ocean was really worm.I could hear the birds tweeting on the treas.I could hear musical increments and people mumbling and chating in patois.
ReplyDeleteI was standing in the middle of the beach right next to the ocean, when a little sent of BBQ spice came to me. So I went to go to find where it came from and I found out that my dad was having a beach party. I lay on golden sand, closed my eyes and listened to the soft rhythm of the waves. It was paradise!
ReplyDeleteI realised the time and it was 4:56.I remembered what my mum said "you have to be back by 5:00" so I got up and ran home.The next when school finished I went to the beach with my friends.we were playing king square for about two hours.Because it was a Friday afternoon I could stay outside for longer. I relaxed on the cold sand and put my blanket around me. I could here my friend's phone ringing the no longer big waves gently moving across the sea.To be continued....
ReplyDeleteSo then after that, I called my friends even my sister and brother came. We had jerk chicken played together we played with the sand we splashed in the water and we had ice lolly'a and we had great fun. After that we lay down on a blanket it was still burning hot so after a while rapped our towels around us and we played some challenge games like who could stay breathing the longest so then we went back home.
ReplyDeleteAfter being alone and hungry for awhile I decided to call my friends over and I told them to bring some patties, chicken. When they came they came with the steel band and reggae we set up all our food and danced all evening.
ReplyDeleteI finished school at 3 o clock I went to the beach. After a while I went to the sea suddenly I heared the ice cream van Oh no wich one shall I choose I like staying in the sea uh let me just get one and come back quickly so then she did and she came back.but oh no when she came back her ice cream so she went again and it went on.
ReplyDeletei can see the salty turqoise sea gently splashing the blistering,gleaming sea
ReplyDeleteit was a beautiful warm day at school it was so hot that there teacher made us go to play time in this heat the teacher made us do boring English and boring math I hated it so I decide to run out of school and go to the beach I kick of my shoe and put on my sandal the waves were gently splashing on my toes I could her a steal drum and I loves steel drums so I walked over to the steel drum and I listened to the steel drum band and the they leafed so did I then I walked home and took a nap
ReplyDeletethe sea is splashing on to the seashells the sea is cleaning the seashells so the people can collect seashells.
ReplyDeleteIt was long boring day at school i was bored and we had no play time and I was sleepy after school I went to the beach had a rest in the flaming sand then after i went for a swim then i went then i started to call down a bit then i went home
ReplyDeleteI have just finished my boring school after all that maths i needed a good lie down.When i got there i was just about to kick off my sandals but i smelt BBQ spice it made me hungry but the nearest food shop was too far.Luckily my Dads beach party was near by.The Jerk chicken was so good the spice just got into me when i finished it i needed a cup of water it was geting dark so i needed to go home THE END
ReplyDeleteOn the way home from school I decided to go to the beach for a while ,anyway the teacher was only teaching English since two o'clock in the afternoon. So I dropped my surfboard onto the ocean floor and went surfing. To be continued...
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ReplyDeleteI was in the beach I felt the hot refreshing Sand I heard the steel drum playing it was like a beach party.
One day after a boring maths session I felt like I needed to go to the beach.The maths discombobulated me . On the way to the beach I felt so tired so I took a nice break.When I got to the beach the sand was blistering hot , the waves were gently lapping on the sand.I decided to go for a swim the water was glacial so I decided to wait. The thought of food was swimming in my mind as I thought of the crispy jerk chicken to be continued ........
ReplyDeleteIt was a hot summer day.In the class all the windows were open but i was still hot same for my friends i could not wait to get out of the classroom. After school i got on my bike and rided to the nearest beach.When i got thare a group of stellbanes wear in the distance i could still hear them but i tried to ignored them but it was still in my ears so i put on my headphones and listend to my gramars recomended bob marly muic i felt so relaxed. The End
ReplyDeleteone day at school it was so boring hot it was a hot day today i just felt like to go to the beach we did maths and we did more work and wish we never had to do any more. finaly it was home tme it was so boring at my house so i thougt i will to spend some time at the beach when i reached there i throwed my bag and laid down on the creamy golden sand i got little bit bored so called my friends then we all surfing race
ReplyDeleteafter my rest my two friends came on the beach to it was the fun part that made it the best day we played football ball games in the water after that my friends had to go home see you tomorrow I said after I feel a sleep until 6pm but then my mum had to stop the best day ever by blowing my phone she said kermarley why ya nah come home come home right now. when I got home mum got me fat cakes ii eated them and went to bed. the end
ReplyDeletecontinue And the steel band wind waved in to the pram tree and the sea crashing in to the sea shore.I can hear the BBQ pan sizzling i feel liker to eat it all up but i cod not because i had to make my way home my mum is probable thinking where am are or when i go home she is going to say where have i been or she will say i was roared all about you i even called your teacher.
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ReplyDeleteAt the beach the steel band let me have a go at their drum and guitar it was fun but I heard my mom calling me for diner so I said good bye to my know friends and went home for diner so I told my mom and dad.They were so amazed they thought I was joking. to be continue
I can hear the waves and l feel relaxed and carm . on the golden sand I want to swim in the bule sea.
ReplyDeleteone day at school it was so boring i just felt like going outside and relax on the beach but i was still at school we did so much maths and we more english i wish we could stop.finally it was home time so ithought i would go to the the beach i reached there i chucked throwed my back away and chucked on the creamy golden sand and relaxed i got my phone and called my friend over to come we had some fun we played surfing races.then more people came with steal bands and food we danced we had some jerk chicken and some acky and salt fish
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ReplyDeleteI herd the parm trees swaging in to the wind and it was going to the beat from the steel band over by the BBQ. The sea was crashing in to the sae shore and the nice gold sand was getting all wet and soggy
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One day at school it was so boring I just felt like going outside and relax on the beach but I was still at school we did so much math and it was going to the beat from the steel band over by the BBQ.
ReplyDeleteI was at school in Jamaica it was so hot I ran in to the sparkling blue water and then I took a long swim .it was so nice to be in the relax water
ReplyDeleteit was a lot of fun but I did Not want to come out of the water it was hot and nice in the water and I new I had to get some food so I can eat and I think I will come back to day
Delete''because I wanted to chill at the beach because of all of that writing at school'' I explained to my mother .
ReplyDeletethe next morning I woke up so ,so early that I came to school earlier than my teachers , when I got to my class and I saw everyone was there same as the teachers they were still not there . I remembered that last Thursday my teacher said that there is no school on Tuesday, then we had to all go back all the way to our home's . I am so sad that we did not get to go to school and my teacher said that we were going to make our own project about football , mine was a really good one.