The last pirates in the line, still grumbling, bumped into those in front, who stood behind Rambashi, transfixed with fear. "Oh no! Ssh! Don't move."
What do you think has happened? What has shocked the men so much? What is going to happen next?
Continue writing the story. Think about the work we have done on the setting they are in, to help you think of ideas. What will become of the firework maker's daughter?
I will be a but nervous but if they can't point a dagger at me was the point of them being s pirate without doing teamwork they just hit each other and have a figth if they can't do team work what they point of being s pirate but I will be a bit scared because of the name of the boat
ReplyDeleteI think that Rambashi was scared because Chulak might have gave Rambashi a scare because he thought that Chulak might be a monster. Rambashi might have been so scared he might think to just run away. Rambashi will try to take the prisimore to safety but still eat her give her money away and kill her.
ReplyDeleteIf it is Chulak, what do you think he would say to the pirates, Destin?
Deletei think that she will be frozen and i think that she is going to see the volcano after rambisha hit the island they will be frozen in fear and they will have a fight with him
ReplyDeletei think its the fire fiend they must of awaken the fire fiend the would probably run for their lives and and forget about Lila and she could continue her mision
ReplyDeleteI think what has happened is that the pirates will eat Lila and she might escape from Rambashi and his gang.I think what has shocked the men so much is that they think Lila is so strong and they might not be able to eat her.I think what is going to happen next is that Lila will escape from them and Chulak will come and save her from the greedy,evil Rambashi's gang.
ReplyDeleteLila knows that there daggers are wood and foil so she is not very scared of them . I think she is not going to give them her the money or she i going to see what they are going to do to her . She is probably thinking they can eat her or one of them might drop out of the boat again and Lila is going to laugh at them and they are going to get mad at Lila even more . Lila might be thinking they can not eat her .
ReplyDeleteI think it is a mad person walking behind them pretending to be them and then he bumbs into one of then the another person then Rambashi and they freaked out because they want Rambashi to get angry at them and shout at them.
ReplyDeleteTHERE'S A FIRE FIEND SWIM AND RUN! ''But we can swim.'' said the pirates '' well I will help you row the boat just GIVE THE OARS PLEASE.'' Said Lila '' Okay!'' Said Rambashi ''Thank you now lets go!'' Said Lila. They rowed the boat as fast as they could to get away from the Fire Fiend. They finally got away from the Fire Fiend and they ran away to this secret place called Lila's home it was somewhere now one could find only Lila the pirates went out to hunt for food and Lila cooked it and pirates said '' Where so sorry to do that to you and we will forget where this place is and never do this to you ever! goodbye'' goodbye'' said Lila. THE END
ReplyDeleteHow do you think the pirates would have reacted to Hamlet? Do you think Lila's father would have welcomed the pirates into their home?
DeleteI think they are so shocked because the fire fiend is shooting bombs in the water,if they move the fire fiend will catch them and throw a bomb at them.Maybe it could be the volcano erupting and they have never seen one before and they got so shocked.It could be because they know that Lila knows that there daggers are not real and they might not even be pirates.
ReplyDeleteI think that the fisherman are on an adventure to the volcano to.
The Pirates what's to kill Lila because the Pirates wants money.and Lila is thinking to go somewhere and chulack can't find her. When Lila was still in the ship she asked that if the Pirates just works in the ship.
ReplyDeleteWhat has made the men stop in fear though, Esmael?
Deletei think that it could be the the crocodiles stalking them and getting ready to attack but i no what they could be so scard of its the non stopping killing maschine fire demon that could melt you like your ice cream in the sun for too long and it will attack them.
ReplyDeleteThat sounds scary! Where have the demons come from? What do they do next?
Deletemaybe it is one of the many minions of the fire-fiend coming to kill her like a killing machine or machine of death
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why look we are standing behind Rambashi why do i have to look you all ways trick me gust look no remember when you said some one was drowning when every one was in side the boat you made me jump in side for no reason so i am not going to look. gust look OK then i will look but if you are not telling the truth wait in till we get back to the boat i will kill you I will look in 3.2.1 oh my gosh he is To Be Continued
ReplyDeleteRemember to include punctuation as you continue, Esther, including speech marks for dialogue. What is it that has shocked them so much?
DeleteI think that they so tigers and lions
ReplyDeleteGreat, you've linked this to our work on the setting. Describe how they might sound and move, Lashay.
Deletei think the men is shocked because they try to scare the young girl by saying give me the money. But sins they were hungry they might of eat her how could it be one of lilas family member trying yo prank her to get scared and go back to her dad they maybe doing that so she dont get kidnap.by strangers then next time she can go with her dad so it all maybe a prank
ReplyDeleteThat's a good point, Jossie. Which one of Lila's friends do you think it may be and how do you think Lila would react to seeing them there? What might she say to them?
DeleteLila was in the gangel with the parties in the boat and the parties they set give the money or we are gang bring your blood if you don't give your money we are gang chrayou with a rop.
ReplyDeleteLila knows that there daggers are wood and foil so she is not very scared of them . I think she is not going to give them her the money or she i going to see what they are going to do to her . She is probably thinking they can eat her or one of them might drop out of the boat again and Lila is going to laugh at them and they are going to get mad at Lila even more . Lila might be thinking they can not eat her .
ReplyDeleteInteresting ideas. Now try to write them as a continuation of the story.
DeleteThe pirats fell of there seet when the boat crash on rocks.
ReplyDeleteThat was earlier in the story though. What do you think they have seen that has made them so shocked, Melissa?
DeleteChapter 3 Lila meets the pirates and she is not terrified but only a bit because they said that they are going to eat her because they have not eaten in days and not just that they was promised a feast. She was not that terrified because there swords is made out of wood and tinfoil and they wanted to destroy Lila with it. Lila as a plan and they don't now what her plan is and her plan is to act like she does not now that there swords are fake and when they are not looking she is going to make a run for it.
ReplyDeleteI think that are go to try to eat up Lila but run around and she jump in the water and then pirate go in the water and he saw a crocodile and then get cashes and Lila escape for the pirate and then pirate come back all of the pirate was angry made the pirate jump in the water and the pirates go to found Lila so they could eat her up.
ReplyDeleteTell us more about the crocodile, Boston.
DeleteBecarful of this dangerous beast Lila took one of her fireworks from her bag she shot it at the tiger the tiger was in pain You saved us.
ReplyDeleteSuddenly there was a ruffle in the leafs...Lila quickly hid behind the palm tree until the shuffling and ruffling stopped.As soon as leader pirate even got to utter a word the ruffling stated again...
ReplyDeleteThen out of nowhere... A TIGER pounced...Rambashi,the leader pirate pulled out his dagger but he had forgotten that THE DAGGER WAS FAKE! it was just wooden with foil wrapped around it."Do something!" screamed Lila "I can't do anything!" shouted Rambashi. To be continued....
Then suddenly a warrior jumped out of the bushes (with a real knife) and pierced the tiger with the machete and kills the tiger.Lila and the Pirates were shocked they could not believe what they'd seen."What?" said the warrior "Did you see what you done!" shouted Rambashi "you are amazing." Lila exclaimed "we're gonna need you." exclaimed Lila.The Pirates and Lila backed out the conversation they huddled round "This guy is amazing did you see what he done wait,of course you saw what he done.I think we're going to need him."exclaimed Lila "Anyone else think we're going to need him?" asked Lila all of the Pirates put up their hands,Lila and the Pirates agreed."Should we introduce ourselfs?" asked Lila "yes"said all the Pirates.To be continued...
Delete"Hi,I'm Lila.This is Rambashi and his pirates,Henry,Alex,Peter,Isaac,Leo and William." said Lila " My name is Tarzan, you could call me Tar for short."exclaimed Tarzan."Hi,Tarzan, umm... do you know any place where we can get food from?" asked Henry .Rambashi smacked Henry in his head "What! I'm hungry." shouted Henry."You can't just ask him for food like that!you just met him!" shouted Rambashi "Actually I don't know where you could get food from but I know where you can make it." Tarzan answered "You do!" shouted everyone all except from Tarzan.
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A bit no don't move I think it coming one of the pirates looked closer and closer and some thing came out of the bosh and the pirate ran back in the boat it was a baby mole with it mum and Dad and then some thing move in the water and it was...the boat it was gust sheking . TO BE CONTINUED
ReplyDeleteI think there would be a tiger and then lila would use one of her fire works to scare the tiger away and then the pirate would free her.
ReplyDeleteLila took one step on the boat. Then suddenly the clowns said ahhh so here is are little silly girl. ''I'm not silly '' said the girl. ohhh yes you are . I can beat you in my sleep your so easy to deafeat.'' Oh year I'm shore you can '' in a unbelieveable way. Yes you are correct and you'll always be right wont' you .'' Yeah I will'' said the little girl. to be continued.
ReplyDeleteI think that there would be a lion and Lila would throw firework at the lion and then the pirates would let Lila go, she would move on to her next journey and then the pirates would follow her up to her next journey.
ReplyDeleteI think what happens that a tiger comes and sees rambasi and his pirates and lila then try to jump to them but then
ReplyDeletelila grabs fireworks from her backpack and pointed them at the tiger and set them of the fireworks they were flying through the air and flying twords the tiger and onece it hit the floor the tiger got scared an ran away so the pirate can not eat her because she just save there lives so they took her to the oter side of the river and wished her good luck getting Razvani the fire feend Royal sulfa so she set of
I think that the Pirates were shocked because they saw a crocodile in the lake coming towards them .
ReplyDeleteAs the crocodile came more towards them Rambashy and his crew went on side of the boat and they all fell into the water and lila helped them out and they took her to the cave,They threatened her for all her money but lila wasn't scared because the Pirates daggers were made of wood and silver paper. But lila wasn't scared to run away so she ran pass the snake tigger and monkeys as the Pirates chrassed her until she ran home so Rambashy and his crew went back.
How do you think Lila's father would have reacted when she got home? What about Chulak?
DeleteOh no I am still very very hungry can we eat something now. My stomach is rumbling for food please. All of us are starving we just want something to eat can't we just kill a badger or something . How can we go on a bad trip with no food we will die it's like you have no feelings for hunger I don't get it look at the size of you . I am NOT EVER NEVER going on one of your horrible terrible trips again! Every body shush especially you you hungry old beast because your being like this you and only you are going to eat my socks for dinner .You are such a bad leader you never make us eat I'm so bourd because of you . I just want to say something my first hobby is eating. That is why that is my favourite thing . Stop trying to make me change my mind because you are still going to eat that rotten sock. Ha next time respect your oldest and leader . Now really be quiet do not turn around who is the bravest person on this boat I'm not they all said so who is nobody they all said
ReplyDeleteTo be continued
The last pirates in the line still grumbling,bumped into those infront who stood behind Rambashi,transfixed with fear.
ReplyDeleteOh no Ssh don't move. There's a Tiger Lila took three golden sneezes out of her bag on one of the Pirates back, and put them infront of the tiger.
Suddenly the tiger ran.Wow said one of the Pirates."Hugh I could have done that myself "said Rambashi.In Lila's head she was thinking How could he
have done that whith a wooden dagger covered with silver paper.
They are full of silliness she said to herself again quietly."Young lady for that brave affence you shall stay one night and we all shall tonight not eat you "said Rambashi bravely."yea"said one trying to be braver "OK "said another trying to be the bravest.
A lion came all the pirates where shocked with fear accept Rambashi and Lila the pirates took a step back...but the lion was stock the pirates behind rambashi started laughing Rambashi said stop your getting it angry then the lion broke free the pirates got out there fake tin foil dagger Lila started laughing what are is those fake daggers going to do get it more angry then Lila just remembered her fireworks she did not get something that hard she hit twice at the lion then the lion went away
ReplyDeleteThey turned around to see a load of meet ling there most of the pirates ran towards it. out of the bush came a hungry tiger the pirates started to run around screaming loudly. then lila remembered her snap dragons (they are fire to be contiud
ReplyDeleteworks) and she fired them at the tiger. The tiger was so scared he ran as fast as his little legs could take him.
DeleteA great expression there Eve! What happens next in your story?
Delete"AAAA screamed the Pirates"it is just a bird drama Lila saw something behind it a a a parrot a parrot roaring squawk a parrot roarin runnnnnnnnn Lila jumped an ran away Pirates jumped in the boatlila set a trap and the lion pounced at the tree and fainted shiver ni timbers to be continued
ReplyDeleteI like the way you've included typical 'pirate talk' Marius! Why did the lion faint? Do the men catch up with Lila? Remember to include punctuation (.,!) as you continue!
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ReplyDeleteMaybe they could have attracted a Crocodile or a hippopotamus because of their noise that they where making.It could have crawled upon the front deck of the boat, and stood there.
ReplyDeleteLila without knowing what to do, jumped towards the tiger and help the silly and horrible pirates even if they never deserved to live. They all went running away somewhere were the tiger couldn't see them " now that you have saved our lives instead of keeping you prisoner you may stay with us as long as you wan." Lila couldn't stop at any longer, so she packed her things and carried on with her journey.
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