man man and nenna spying on the villages in the square and watching the constable carry the crimal in hand cuffs and it was big walk and they caught some won else stealing with an heavy old rusty red van man man and nenna said to each other what we conna do there is a nother thief that means big walk wasen't the thief it is somebody else.More coconuts yams fowls are gonna be missing again.
Maybe if Duke hadn't been caught sooner or later Big walk would have been arested the villagers would hate him even more Nena and Man-Man think the thief really was Big walk and they would probably banned him from the village. Maybe if the Constable had arested Big walk food, animals even coconuts would still go missing. To be continued
Nenna and Man man were out side the town square.They saw a blue helmet and saw Big Walk in hand cuffs. Neena and Man man were starting to fell sorry for Big walk .There were a group of people shouting and yelling and suddenly they spotted Duke in the crowd. Duke was grinning like he was hiding some thing. Nenna started to think she was thinking about how she saw a red van parked in her fields after the van left she went out side and there weren't that meny coconuts. To be continued
Nenna and Man man started to feall worried Nenna was thinking really hard but still she did not know at all. The next day Nenna and Man man started to look for strange things. To be continued
they could noy find any thing strange they started to fell like they knew some one they knew was hidding some thing dut.Evry one they knew will never steal at all the end
Nenna and Man man carefully sneaked outside.At the brink of Nennas eye she saw Duke trying to steal some bananas Nenna was shocked to see duke steal bananas so he is so rich because he steals. Duke is the nicest person in the village everyone likes him but he is the one that blames people but he is the real thief.
Nanna and Man man was walking down town squar. Then they saw the police barging through the crowd and jump on Big Walk. Neena looked devasted because she knew he was innocent. Duke was guilty and should pay Man Man said. They had to make a plan. to be continued.
Nanna and Man man looked at the police erest Big walk.After I wile Nanna and man man was sad of Big but stil sam won is stliling in the villege. The next day Nanna and man man went to the shop with there mam and dad and wet to sell som of there food because they had to mach food. Then they went to see the police Nanna said to him sam won is stiling the villege.
IN the dark gloomy night where people crawding around big walk shouthing and sreaming at him. Duke was not there be he was the gilty one he is the on that is stealing animal to cook and eat and even stealing fruit Duke is the crimnal. to be countiued
one sunny bright day a boy and a girl call man man and nia playing out side but there was a problem two problem one was that there parent whet to go shopping and they took the donkey wich was the only way to go to get arown and problem number two was that there was a thief in the village and evry body new that it was big walk that had been steeling that why nia and man man sneaked out at midnight they we walking with the creapy crawles on the grown but then they heard coconuts falling they were realy gonna catch the thief but when they looked the thief was gone they frownd and sprited home. the next day big walk was in the hands of police only one problem they did not have enouth evidenc man man said it could not be big walk but if it is not big walk then who is it it is the duke because me and my sister seaked out las night when we did notfind him but i saw the red van the chife ran to barge him and said your going to jail. the end
Neena and Man-man saw that big walk was arrested by the chief constable badly after that Neena feel sad for big walk so she found a way to see who the real thief so she think it was duke then neena went to investigate the situation but she didn't find enething so it all think it was big-walk all along so big-walk got locked up.
Duke was sanding in the town square grinning as big walk was getting handcuffed to the ground.Neena and Man-Man rushed down to the town square.The police were struggling to contain big walk .Duke was screaming "There we go!You have captured the rightful thief,!"Man-Man pushed Duke out of the way and screamed so loud the police covered their ears .He grabbed big walk and Neena, they all ran away in a hurry to escape."Stop them!"the chief cried. They all ran and jumped into a cab."Thank you for helping me escape from the police."said big walk in a scruffy voice. For the rest of their lives they became fugitives in Jamaica. To be continued......,.,
Neena and man man we're going to go to the park but there was a crowd of anxious people duke arested big walk Nena and man man was going to find the thief it was 4oclock in the morning they heard coconuts falling on the floor the thief was big walk all a long.
Neena and man- man was having a little strole to shopping and then Neena and man-man barged through everyone. then Neena grabbed big walk and said were is all the bannanas and big walk said I don't know so who did it then said man-man. later on that night duke started to steel some more bannanas but he steel didn't get caught and then he ran home just incase he would get caught. so the next day they woke up and they ran as fast as they can and checked if the steeler was there but suddenly the steeler wasn't there so there spy teel after noon but the steeler was steel not there.
neena and man-man were walking downtown suddenly nenna man-man saw the police barging through the loud crowd in 5 seconds they hooked up big walk man-man felt bad for big - walk neena saw duke grind. neena man-man left before the crowd got any worse when they got home neena thought how sad it is to be locked up for no reason.the next day neena and man-man went for a stroll then i saw duke in his red van a while later neena and man man to be continued
Neena and Man Man were in the town on a usual happened the police went though the crowed barging and hitting people. until he sore big walk.he grabed him and put the hand cuffs right on his hand. neena felt deserved.she new there was nothing she could do. suddenly she sore dukes big grin.and then she said it is not big walk it is duke.
Nena and man man they went to the market they saw chief consterbale pushing and barging through the big crowd. The chief touched big walk and grabbed him. Big walk was horrified because he didn't do any think wrong. Big walk asked what did he do and chief said he found a man on camera stealing coconuts of the tree . Nenna was terrified she didn't believe a word what big walk said . the other night Nenna and man man heard somethink and saw the thief they went to the real thief and catched him and gave him to the chief as quick as they could . Big walk and Nenna and man man had a party .
Nanna and man-man was walking down town... there was a BIG crowd.So they decided to head back home.It was a dark night .ooooooooooowwww said man-man getting hurt in the big crowd. I can see somebody stealing Coconuts,yams,chicken,potato,mango and bread fruit it was horrible.
Nenna and man man were in Kingston with there parents to help with the shop. As they selled lambs and other food they had in mind who is the thief? They were determined to catch the thief / thieves. Meanwhile duke went to big walk's house"big walk my man "he said "what do you want "replied big walk "join me and steal stuff and there will be no miserably in your life "said duke evilly "I'm in"said big walk as they ran to the coconut plantation.
As Nenna and Man Man came home they ran to check on the coconut plantation and they saw it recked like a car drove on it. Immediately they showed their parents "oh my gosh who done this!"they shouted "Thieves done it" they replied. To be continued
I think that the police are going to put big walk on the ground then arrest big walk then neena is gong to tell the police no don't arrest him you should arest duke because big walk didn't steel the coconuts so lock duke up even so he is your friend but steel lock him up
Well done Keneil, but you need to write this again. This is a story so you need to write in the third person. Also, you need to remember to add 4 Red to your name.
Neena and Man-Man were in the town and were relaxing. After relaxing they hear some shouting."STOP THIEF!" Shouted the police chief. Neena and Man-Man were following the police. Unfortunately Big-Walk trip over a rock and fall over. Big-Walk got arrested and got in jail. But the real thief was Duke. The comfortableness friend of Big-walk. He felt sad of his friend in jail, but in fact he was the thief. He stolen bananas , yams , chicken and rice. In fact he stole everything in shops and houses. Why did he stolen all food in the village? Is he in a Diet? Dose he want to be fat? He stolen everything. All the villagers all starting starving to death but Neena and Man-Man took Dukes food and gave all the food to the people in the village.
Once apon a time there wasd a boy and a girl neena and manman they hered something one night but they were too scared to look.But then manman said it might be the most unpopular guy in the village...BIG WALK he was accused of doing everything but then when neena had put her thinking cap on and thought are people just hating on big walk because hes so far away from a real or clean person.then neena went shopping one day and more than 57 police were gathered and stuffed in the shop and they pushed me away then 4 people shout vishously THIEF THIEF AREAST HIM.Then duke had a huge smile on his face and that looked suspisuos and whats even more suspisuos is that he ran out mcdonald and went to the village and what she saw him doing she was shoked so the most popular person was stealing DUKE IS THE ONE STEALING.....
Neena and Man-man were shopping in the market until the police was barging through the giant crowd until the police saw the person they wanted ... Big Walk. The police grabbed Big Walk and dragged him off to prison. Neena and Man-man were disappionted, the villagers started laughing and cheering. Duke celebrated his victory of not being guilty and framing Big Walk. He whispered as low as possible "ha ha ha, that big thing has been thrown to prison and everyone loves me, not that scruffy old parrot." The real thief was Duke, the popular man in the village but Neena and Man-man didn't say a thing.To be continued
Neena and man-man were shopping for food but man-man was looking out side the door he called Neena to see what was happening to big walk the town chief police man bargaining though people. They saw big walk getting arrested for stealing from the plantation but he said it was not me it was duke but the town chief police man didn't believe him because duke was his best friend so he will never ever do that so the town chief police man took big walk to jail but on the other side behind the town chief police man duke was laughing eveilly because he was stealing thecoconuts from the plantation the next day big walk was released from jail that night big walk dog was digging a hole next to there hut which they share to be continued
Nenna and Man-Man we're shopping in the market.When they came out they had to go the long way because that way was blocked off.Then they saw the chief contable barging past the crowd then the kids foloed him everyone gazed at this smelly,old,fat man everyone started calling him big walk because of the way he walks and his size.A couple of weeks later people's foods pigs yams and coconuts when big walk came back they all started shouted at him then big walk ran away but.Nenna chased him to his hut but Big walk's dog chased Nenna back down the long hill that leaded back to the village.Out of no wear Nenna was dragged into a dark alley way she screamed as loud as she could but knowone heard.As the dark figure had taked of his mask Nenna looked in terer it was Duke.
Duke was shopping in the market when.Big walk was being arrested Duke smiled "That scruffy old thin is being arrested now I can continue stealing"Said Duke Nenna and Man-man was looking through the glass Duke though that no won was looking quickly he grabbed as much coconuts as he could and stuffed them bag. Nenna and Man-man managed to find a hiding spot Duke walked outside "That,s strange"said Nenna he just walked outside"yea he should be running "Said Man-man. Duke saw a crowd of villages chating about him"Hay what's all this about "Said Duke everyone froze whit excitement o my god it,s him.To be continued
Nenna was shocked,So it was you i am so disappointed,shut up i can do what i want said Duke Nenna looked at the beach for a minute I love the summer breeze.Look said Man-man he is getting away come one lets get him Nenna and Man-man ran as fast as thare little legs could carry them.It was one o clock when thay started running now it is 2 o clock. Man-man needed to catch her breath come on slow coach said Nenna. Just forget it we will never catch him meanwhile Duke fownd him self in prison.The end
In the city there was a crowd of people shouting arrested big walk big walk was in jail people were pleased that big walk was arrested they had a party Nenna and Man man were upset they hid in bushes they said did you hear coconuts falling its duke watch when everybody knows
Nenna and Man-man were just coming out of the market. When all of a sudden 2 police men barged past everyone. When they found who they wanted Big walk was handcuffed to the ground ,sorry mate but you are going down,said officer jeff,what i did not do any thing,said Big walk all of a sudden everyone started chering THIEF THIEF AREST HIM.Big walk looked at the crowd and said noting he just looked sad.
Nenna and man-man were shopping in the market man-man saw something happening near by the plantation the town chief police man was bargain through people man-man called neana she saw what was happening big walk was being arrested for steeling from the plantation he tried to say it was not him it was duke but the town chief police man didn't believe him because duke and him are best friends he slapped handcuffs onto big walk hands he took big walk to jail duke on the other side bihind the town chief police man he was laughing evilly because big walk got arrested
man man and nenna spying on the villages in the square and watching the constable carry the crimal in hand cuffs and it was big walk and they caught some won else stealing with an heavy old rusty red van man man and nenna said to each other what we conna do there is a nother thief that means big walk wasen't the thief it is somebody else.More coconuts yams fowls are gonna be missing again.
ReplyDeleteIf duke was not arestid the village will be in danger and they will be por and they will not and it will hapan gan and gan and how will they eat
ReplyDeleteIf Duke wasn't caught I think he will continue being a thief. Also if Duke wasn't caught Big Walk might have went to prison.
ReplyDeleteThis is not a story Deborah. You need to write an alternative ending, where Duke gets away with the crime.
DeleteMaybe if Duke hadn't been caught sooner or later Big walk would have been arested the villagers would hate him even more Nena and Man-Man think the thief really was Big walk and they would probably banned him from the village. Maybe if the Constable had arested Big walk food, animals even coconuts would still go missing. To be continued
ReplyDeleteNenna and Man man were out side the town square.They saw a blue helmet and saw Big Walk in hand cuffs. Neena and Man man were starting to fell sorry for Big walk .There were a group of people shouting and yelling and suddenly they spotted Duke in the crowd. Duke was grinning like he was hiding some thing. Nenna started to think she was thinking about how she saw a red van parked in her fields after the van left she went out side and there weren't that meny coconuts. To be continued
ReplyDeleteNenna and Man man started to feall worried Nenna was thinking really hard but still she did not know at all. The next day Nenna and Man man started to look for strange things. To be continued
Deletethey could noy find any thing strange they started to fell like they knew some one they knew was hidding some thing dut.Evry one they knew will never steal at all the end
DeleteNenna and Man man carefully sneaked outside.At the brink of Nennas eye she saw Duke trying to steal some bananas Nenna was shocked to see duke steal bananas so he is so rich because he steals. Duke is the nicest person in the village everyone likes him but he is the one that blames people but he is the real thief.
ReplyDeleteNanna and Man man was walking down town squar. Then they saw the police barging through the crowd and jump on Big Walk. Neena looked devasted because she knew he was innocent. Duke was guilty and should pay Man Man said. They had to make a plan. to be continued.
ReplyDeleteEveryone would just never talk to Big walk he would be a prisoner his crops would fail Nena and Man Man would feel happy that Big walk was in prison.
ReplyDeleteNanna and Man man looked at the police erest Big walk.After I wile Nanna and man man was sad of Big but stil sam won is stliling in the villege. The next day Nanna and man man went to the shop with there mam and dad and wet to sell som of there food because they had to mach food. Then they went to see the police Nanna said to him sam won is stiling the villege.
ReplyDeleteIN the dark gloomy night where people crawding around big walk shouthing and sreaming at him. Duke was not there be he was the gilty one he is the on that is stealing animal to cook and eat and even stealing fruit Duke is the crimnal. to be countiued
ReplyDeleteone sunny bright day a boy and a girl call man man and nia playing out side but there was a problem two problem one was that there parent whet to go shopping and they took the donkey wich was the only way to go to get arown and problem number two was that there was a thief in the village and evry body new that it was big walk that had been steeling that why nia and man man sneaked out at midnight they we walking with the creapy crawles on the grown but then they heard coconuts falling they were realy gonna catch the thief but when they looked the thief was gone they frownd and sprited home. the next day big walk was in the hands of police only one problem they did not have enouth evidenc man man said it could not be big walk but if it is not big walk then who is it it is the duke because me and my sister seaked out las night when we did notfind him but i saw the red van the chife ran to barge him and said your going to jail. the end
ReplyDeleteNeena and Man-man saw that big walk was arrested by the chief constable badly after that Neena feel sad for big walk so she found a way to see who the real thief so she think it was duke then neena went to investigate the situation but she didn't find enething so it all think it was big-walk all along so big-walk got locked up.
ReplyDeleteDuke was sanding in the town square grinning as big walk was getting handcuffed to the ground.Neena and Man-Man rushed down to the town square.The police were struggling to contain big walk .Duke was screaming "There we go!You have captured the rightful thief,!"Man-Man pushed Duke out of the way and screamed so loud the police covered their ears .He grabbed big walk and Neena, they all ran away in a hurry to escape."Stop them!"the chief cried. They all ran and jumped into a cab."Thank you for helping me escape from the police."said big walk in a scruffy voice. For the rest of their lives they became fugitives in Jamaica. To be continued......,.,
ReplyDeleteNeena and man man we're going to go to the park but there was a crowd of anxious people duke arested big walk Nena and man man was going to find the thief it was 4oclock in the morning they heard coconuts falling on the floor the thief was big walk all a long.
ReplyDeleteNeena and man- man was having a little strole to shopping and then Neena and man-man barged through everyone. then Neena grabbed big walk and said were is all the bannanas and big walk said I don't know so who did it then said man-man. later on that night duke started to steel some more bannanas but he steel didn't get caught and then he ran home just incase he would get caught. so the next day they woke up and they ran as fast as they can and checked if the steeler was there but suddenly the steeler wasn't there so there spy teel after noon but the steeler was steel not there.
ReplyDeleteneena and man-man were walking downtown suddenly nenna man-man saw the police barging through the loud crowd in 5 seconds they hooked up big walk man-man felt bad for big - walk neena saw duke grind. neena man-man left before the crowd got any worse when they got home neena thought how sad it is to be locked up for no reason.the next day neena and man-man went for a stroll then i saw duke in his red van a while later neena and man man to be continued
ReplyDeleteNeena and Man Man were in the town on a usual happened the police went though the crowed barging and hitting people. until he sore big walk.he grabed him and put the hand cuffs right on his hand. neena felt deserved.she new there was nothing she could do. suddenly she sore dukes big grin.and then she said it is not big walk it is duke.
ReplyDeleteA good start Hafsa, you must remember to use capital letters and spaces in the right places. Now you must continue your story.
DeleteNena and man man they went to the market they saw chief consterbale pushing and barging through the big crowd. The chief touched big walk and grabbed him. Big walk was horrified because he didn't do any think wrong. Big walk asked what did he do and chief said he found a man on camera stealing coconuts of the tree . Nenna was terrified she didn't believe a word what big walk said . the other night Nenna and man man heard somethink and saw the thief they went to the real thief and catched him and gave him to the chief as quick as they could . Big walk and Nenna and man man had a party .
ReplyDeleteNanna and man-man was walking down town... there was a BIG crowd.So they decided to head back home.It was a dark night
ReplyDelete.ooooooooooowwww said man-man getting hurt in the big crowd.
I can see somebody stealing Coconuts,yams,chicken,potato,mango and bread fruit it was horrible.
Nenna and man man were in Kingston with there parents to help with the shop. As they selled lambs and other food they had in mind who is the thief? They were determined to catch the thief / thieves. Meanwhile duke went to big walk's house"big walk my man "he said "what do you want "replied big walk "join me and steal stuff and there will be no miserably in your life "said duke evilly "I'm in"said big walk as they ran to the coconut plantation.
ReplyDeleteAs Nenna and Man Man came home they ran to check on the coconut plantation and they saw it recked like a car drove on it. Immediately they showed their parents "oh my gosh who done this!"they shouted "Thieves done it" they replied. To be continued
Super start David, please continue your story.
DeleteI think that the police are going to put big walk on the ground then arrest big walk then neena is gong to tell the police no don't arrest him you should arest duke because big walk didn't steel the coconuts so lock duke up even so he is your friend but steel lock him up
ReplyDeleteWell done Keneil, but you need to write this again. This is a story so you need to write in the third person. Also, you need to remember to add 4 Red to your name.
DeleteNeena and Man-Man were in the town and were relaxing. After relaxing they hear some shouting."STOP THIEF!" Shouted the police chief. Neena and Man-Man were following the police. Unfortunately Big-Walk trip over a rock and fall over. Big-Walk got arrested and got in jail. But the real thief was Duke. The comfortableness friend of Big-walk. He felt sad of his friend in jail, but in fact he was the thief. He stolen bananas , yams , chicken and rice. In fact he stole everything in shops and houses. Why did he stolen all food in the village? Is he in a Diet? Dose he want to be fat? He stolen everything. All the villagers all starting starving to death but Neena and Man-Man took Dukes food and gave all the food to the people in the village.
ReplyDeleteOnce apon a time there wasd a boy and a girl neena and manman they hered something one night but they were too scared to look.But then manman said it might be the most unpopular guy in the village...BIG WALK he was accused of doing everything but then when neena had put her thinking cap on and thought are people just hating on big walk because hes so far away from a real or clean person.then neena went shopping one day and more than 57 police were gathered and stuffed in the shop and they pushed me away then 4 people shout vishously THIEF THIEF AREAST HIM.Then duke had a huge smile on his face and that looked suspisuos and whats even more suspisuos is that he ran out mcdonald and went to the village and what she saw him doing she was shoked so the most popular person was stealing DUKE IS THE ONE STEALING.....
ReplyDeleteNeena and Man-man were shopping in the market until the police was barging through the giant crowd until the police saw the person they wanted ... Big Walk. The police grabbed Big Walk and dragged him off to prison. Neena and Man-man were disappionted, the villagers started laughing and cheering. Duke celebrated his victory of not being guilty and framing Big Walk. He whispered as low as possible "ha ha ha, that big thing has been thrown to prison and everyone loves me, not that scruffy old parrot." The real thief was Duke, the popular man in the village but Neena and Man-man didn't say a thing.To be continued
ReplyDeleteNeena and man-man were shopping for food but man-man was looking out side the door he called Neena to see what was happening to big walk the town chief police man bargaining though people. They saw big walk getting arrested for stealing from the plantation but he said it was not me it was duke but the town chief police man didn't believe him because duke was his best friend so he will never ever do that so the town chief police man took big walk to jail but on the other side behind the town chief police man duke was laughing eveilly because he was stealing thecoconuts from the plantation the next day big walk was released from jail that night big walk dog was digging a hole next to there hut which they share to be continued
ReplyDeleteNenna and Man-Man we're shopping in the market.When they came out they had to go the long way because that way was blocked off.Then they saw the chief contable barging past the crowd then the kids foloed him everyone gazed at this smelly,old,fat man everyone started calling him big walk because of the way he walks and his size.A couple of weeks later people's foods pigs yams and coconuts when big walk came back they all started shouted at him then big walk ran away but.Nenna chased him to his hut but Big walk's dog chased Nenna back down the long hill that leaded back to the village.Out of no wear Nenna was dragged into a dark alley way she screamed as loud as she could but knowone heard.As the dark figure had taked of his mask Nenna looked in terer it was Duke.
ReplyDeleteDuke was shopping in the market when.Big walk was being arrested Duke smiled "That scruffy old thin is being arrested now I can continue stealing"Said Duke Nenna and Man-man was looking through the glass Duke though that no won was looking quickly he grabbed as much coconuts as he could and stuffed them bag. Nenna and Man-man managed to find a hiding spot Duke walked outside "That,s strange"said Nenna he just walked outside"yea he should be running "Said Man-man. Duke saw a crowd of villages chating about him"Hay what's all this about "Said Duke everyone froze whit excitement o my god it,s him.To be continued
ReplyDeleteNenna was shocked,So it was you i am so disappointed,shut up i can do what i want said Duke Nenna looked at the beach for a minute I love the summer breeze.Look said Man-man he is getting away come one lets get him Nenna and Man-man ran as fast as thare little legs could carry them.It was one o clock when thay started running now it is 2 o clock. Man-man needed to catch her breath come on slow coach said Nenna. Just forget it we will never catch him meanwhile Duke fownd him self in prison.The end
ReplyDeleteIn the city there was a crowd of people shouting arrested big walk big walk was in jail people were pleased that big walk was arrested they had a party Nenna and Man man were upset they hid in bushes they said did you hear coconuts falling its duke watch when everybody knows
ReplyDeleteNenna and Man-man were just coming out of the market. When all of a sudden 2 police men barged past everyone. When they found who they wanted Big walk was handcuffed to the ground ,sorry mate but you are going down,said officer jeff,what i did not do any thing,said Big walk all of a sudden everyone started chering THIEF THIEF AREST HIM.Big walk looked at the crowd and said noting he just looked sad.
ReplyDeleteNenna and man-man were shopping in the market man-man saw something happening near by the plantation the town chief police man was bargain through people man-man called neana she saw what was happening big walk was being arrested for steeling from the plantation he tried to say it was not him it was duke but the town chief police man didn't believe him because duke and him are best friends he slapped handcuffs onto big walk hands he took big walk to jail duke on the other side bihind the town chief police man he was laughing evilly because big walk got arrested
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